Between your dewy lips and wet time
I see clocks of white hills
humming skins, throbbing breaths
pure, symmetrical breaths.
Inside the tempestuous wilderness
of your eyelids and thumbnail
A reflection of paradise exists.
Once again, the frozen earth erupts now
holding chills, heat and rains all inside
sulking the primordial fights
and blossoming tiny weeds of hope.
In the moisture of inks and skies
Indexation of our inundated words occur
Hysteria, Incantations, Contentment
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60 thoughts on “Entrance”
Finally sun shines in your world Devika. But it’s equally beautiful. For people like me for whom the darkness is more relaxing, this verse serves as a tinge of hope.
ok let me explain what I saw,it’s like men and women making out,in first para it’s like both hearts are beating at same pace as they take symmetric breaths, and I consider paradise as body of individual between eyelids and thumb nails,and in third paragraph I feel like woman is Hurst badly in oast,with that eternal love new hope of life has entered her soul, and last paragraph about all laughs and feelings both felt.SORRY IF I SEE IT IN WRONG WAY
I just saw that as a romantic pooems also the women’s heart in romance ,where her past is getting healed through lobe showed by man.And she see new life and new beginning through him..it’s what I thought after reading
It is beautiful how you pen this, finding paradise in another’s eyes and soul. This is warm and filled with admiration and that last line, sounds like the culmination of shared love!
I absolutely adore when you write about love and its form. Its so beautiful how one single person can become the universe for another, where he finds the solace and beauty residing together.
Beautifully written as always.Love and Hugs.
Lovely composition..it’s such a contrast to the last one I read. The various shades of Devika shimmer in the ocean of poems in this blog..a reflection of paradise indeed!
Finally sun shines in your world Devika. But it’s equally beautiful. For people like me for whom the darkness is more relaxing, this verse serves as a tinge of hope.
Admirable work dear.
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Sun is just a part of my dark life and words. Let’s see if the sun stays or not.
Thank you for your time and thoughts!
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My pleasure 🙂
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Passionate and wildly stylish… as is your style, dearest 🌹🌹🤗
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Thank you love!
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Now this is intoxicating! ❤️
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Very visual! Very romantic.
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Thank you so much.
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🙂
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Is it about new hope of love inside soul?????
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As you see it!
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But I want to see with your lens
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ok let me explain what I saw,it’s like men and women making out,in first para it’s like both hearts are beating at same pace as they take symmetric breaths, and I consider paradise as body of individual between eyelids and thumb nails,and in third paragraph I feel like woman is Hurst badly in oast,with that eternal love new hope of life has entered her soul, and last paragraph about all laughs and feelings both felt.SORRY IF I SEE IT IN WRONG WAY
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You didn’t tell me whether my perception is right or wrong
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It’s pretty correct.
Your perception and words are of great value.
Thank you, Kalyan!
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But I think there is another side of this poem,may be you are also telling about dark side of girl who is entering to light
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No, there is no other side.
It’s only about hope as you may see in my tags too!
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I just saw that as a romantic pooems also the women’s heart in romance ,where her past is getting healed through lobe showed by man.And she see new life and new beginning through him..it’s what I thought after reading
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Yeah true!
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Yes I know..but it can be in different way also know..soo I got doubt that whether I understood it in wrong way or not
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Another beautiful, well written poem 😃💛. Is Devika your name?
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Yes sir.
Devika it is!
Thank you for paying a read!
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Hi Devika, I’m Walt 😃 Lovely name ❤
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Oh, we Indians have a unique way of respecting elders as we don’t generally call them with their first name.
Anyway, thank you so much!:)
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I understand 😃
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🙏🙏
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I have read this three times now – it’s exquisite! All I can say is that “entrance” is an apt name, as your words do just that 🙂
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Oh I have been missing you here.
So nice to finally see your soulful words darling!
❤️
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Thank you lovely❤☺
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Very nice!
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It is beautiful how you pen this, finding paradise in another’s eyes and soul. This is warm and filled with admiration and that last line, sounds like the culmination of shared love!
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Thank you. I am all good now.
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I am in Chennai currently.
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Wonderful. 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
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🙏🙏🙏
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If you ever write a poetry collection and publish it, then please let me know!! Love the poem!!!
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Oh sure darling, you are a gem btw❤️
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Beautiful words. ⚘💕
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Oh you❤️❤️
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Wow. What beautiful words!!
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Thank you.
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I absolutely adore when you write about love and its form. Its so beautiful how one single person can become the universe for another, where he finds the solace and beauty residing together.
Beautifully written as always.Love and Hugs.
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I feel blessed now 🙏🙏
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My pleasure Devika.
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Amazing post 🙂 Keep Glittering ; love TGA by MIsha ! Rise N Shine
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❤️❤️
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Symmetrical breaths …..
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Thanks.
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Ooo Devika, the imagery in this one is resplendent. Absolutely love it!
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Thank you Allie.
I always love to hear your words.
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^_^
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It brought a genuine smile!! Every paragraph is like an essence of myriad hopes, love, beauty, words!!!❤️❤️👌👏 Loved it yar!👏👏
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Oh thank you Paarth.
How sweet of you.
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😊😊😊😋
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This is lovely & full of beauty, as i told you many times you’re the among the best when you write romantics & love.
Keep writing!!😇
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🙏🙏.
Thank you Prashant.
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Beautiful!!!
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Lovely composition..it’s such a contrast to the last one I read. The various shades of Devika shimmer in the ocean of poems in this blog..a reflection of paradise indeed!
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Ah, this comment makes me happy.
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Throbbing my breathe with your passion-filled words, eh? ❤ ❤
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