How many dark spots do you have,
Lizards and crocodile scream
to see you knitting lips on lips.
Papers mock your hubris hands
Ruffles and hibernation
In the planets of chivalry
in the swamp of lies
I see your lies and eyes,
A corrosion of rock.
I am a piece of molten clock
and
Your dark fingers are bait
like burning of ashes
cold powder.
Burial grounds smirk,
vicious cigars, vicious you
Discomfort intrudes my throat
with swollen ebbs of a horizon
I am a distorted voice
to see your insane games
only
I am more rapturous to
see you dying.
®MVS
Devika, was the nib you wrote this with, a talon? 🙂
Sharp words, but oh-so-well penned!
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Haha. Thanks for that!
But yes people are really messed up and hypocrites often.:)
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Yup, for sure!
Want to invite you over to mine for today’s… tashreef rakhiye 🙂
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great comment..I must say!
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What does that mean?
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Kunal’s comment.. trenchant words
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🙏🏽🙏🏽🙏🏽
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Powerful and beautiful writing.
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Thanks!
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Sure, dear!
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I think I get this very well, D! This was so purgatory, even for me.
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High five dear N!❤️🤗
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High five, dear D ❤
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Love your new DP btw
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Areyy thanks.
Would change it shortly though as this WP is full of creeps.😊❤️
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Woh bhi hain. Don’t you just hate it?!
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Tell me about it.
It’s not one creep na..I can’t even begin to describe.
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Powerful as usual! ❤️
In love with your words
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Thank you Braeden.
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Welcome my friend
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Please check your spam.
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Will do!
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I don’t see anything sorry.
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But I have been commenting a lot.
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Well that’s great! I will keep checking.
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Почему так депрессивно?
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I understand only English.
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I use translator. =)
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Was intense! Your repertoire of words is wonderfull. Always dark.
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Yeah, I love to play with words and thank you so much.
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Welcome!
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Beautifully crafted Devika. Wonderful images created by your words. I hope I never make you angry! ☺💛
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Thankyou
No, surely you are kind to me!
It’s the rest of the fake group.
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I’m glad ☺💛
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Very nice poem!
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So many thanks!
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Your welcome fellow poet!
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Perfect
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Thank you.
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I’m curious have you ever been influence by the ‘Surrealism movement’? Your work and the way you express yourself is very surrealism and packed with imagery that gets the reader to understand how you feel and what sparks the inspiration.
I’m so sorry your going through this issue with people. I hope I’m not one of them.
Your work is amazing.
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As for now i write only what triggers my mind and mostly it’s cryptic and dark. I have not read anything as you mentioned but would definitely love to peep into that horizon.
Thank you for those warm wishes and yes I will be fine soon.
Thank you Charlie.
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Your writing is cryptic and dark and I think that’s why I am always surprised and amazed by your creativity in writing and your vision of words that play in the readers imagination.
You are a master of your own craft. 🙂
Here’s a link to a surrealism page dedicated to poets. scroll down and you’ll see all the surrealist poets and how they write and which reminds me of your work.
http://surrealism-plays.com/surrealistpoems.html
Let me know what you think.
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I definitely feel that this poem has a surrealist touch to it!
Do you happen to like Faulkner? I think Faulkner kind of shares the whimsical nature of surrealism. As I Lay Dying is definitely one of my favorite books.
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I do love him. His writing always intrigued me and my thinking process . Faulkner is one of his style definitely!
Thanks for sharing your views.
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I have not heard of ‘William Faulkner’ but I’ll definitely check his poems. I’m always in search for poets that I can relate to and observe their writing style. 🙂
You know something…that book title has been calling to me for some time now. I think I might have heard of Faulkner before it just crossed my mind. But, seriously though, I will do more research on him and the book.
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He actually isn’t a poet, but he writes really good stream of consciousness. And yes, I absolutely love his titles “As I Lay Dying” and “The Sound and the Fury”!
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I took a look at his work yesterday…spent a few hours on end reading his poems, and a sample of his books. Yes, he definitely caught my attention and I’ll have his books on my list to buy. He was a great writer and pure stream consciousness that’s a fact. Thank you so much for introducing me to his work.
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You’re welcome. I’m glad you like him!
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Very much so. 🙂 Bless you a millions my friend. 🙂
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Wow thank you 🙂
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🙂
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Crisp and mesmerising post
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Thank you so much.
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very intense..after a while!
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Thank you after a while. Sigh!
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🙂
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“I am a distorted voice
to see your insane games only
I am more rapturous to
see you dying”
The dark & sharp loud words can only be seen through your imaginary visions.Loved it again👌📝
Keep writing!!
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Your words always motivates me and makes me happy.
Thank you so much Prashant.
🙏
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You’re welcome.
Keep writing!😇
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A single fish may ruin a pond…..
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Your writing is so captivating and original. I do admire it so. The last 7 lines are my favourite – so electric.
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Thank you Friend.
I am really grateful that you always take out time to read my words.
So much love❤️
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❤
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Powerful
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Thank you for the read.
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