There are things that I want to protect. Like the oxidised carbon,
like your mouth and my ferocious voice.
My earth shaped body: heaven resist into my temple mind,
like your inundate doses of love prayers to me.
Your sun-kissed pavements, mosaic dreams.
Your vintage lullaby’s while I am a mess.
The sunsets that we adored while we clicked our moist tongues
There are things I want to count time and again.
The hush oceanic fingerprints you carved onto my bosom
The silence that we sank into, the eruptions of sordid lust and galaxies revolving
If I had a red box, I will preserve your words, pictures, stained teacups,
the old mahogany chair on which we did crosswords together
That old whiskey smelling blankets I hid
after you were gone,
I want to count it again and again.
Your white shirts piling on my navel,
like a tropical meadow of white roses
The cold layers of evening when I drank and danced
You kissed me like a newborn baby’s skin,
My abhorrence divided right here,
Till my skin melted, aroused and melted again in yours,
I will count that further and further.
Published yet again in Visual Verse.
Many thanks to the team! https://visualverse.org/submissions/i-see-you-3/
©My Valiant Soul
So very beautiful.
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Thank you so much
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Beautiful ❤
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So nice to hear from an amazing writer like you, Maranda!
Much love.
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Oh thank you, that is so sweet of you to say!
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❤️
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Ohhh!!! Beautiful… Love!
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This is just my dedication and love that I feel for my man. Hope he likes it too!
Thankyou, K!❤️
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That’s wonderful… I’m sure he will 🙂
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❤️❤️
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Thanks a lot for the reblog!
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This love and this affection. It’s just wow.
Stay happy and blessed ❤️
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Aww.
Thanks Priya!❤️
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❤️❤️
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I love the longing and sensuality of the poem. It’s stunning. I didn’t expect anything less from a talented poetess like you..
https://lilaiamoreliwordsaresacred.wordpress.com/
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You are way too kind, so many blessings coming right up to you!
❤️❤️
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I’m only stating the truth. Thank you!!!
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Oh you are sweet!
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” inundate doses of love prayers to me.
Your sun kissed pavements, mosaic dreams”- and it was at this point in the poem we were all blown the fuck away with imagery lol.
well penned.
adored sunsets with clicking moist tongues…splendid.
“Your white shirts piling on my naval”- you just rolled me up in a carpet and threw me in the east river…never to be seen again.
well turned lines,excellent content and style.
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I am so thrilled to read your gracious words, I can’t even begin to express my gratitude to you. When my words connect to my readers, it really means a lot.
Thank you so much!
Cheers!
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This is seductive💘.Again you used a chemical word oxidised carbon…I think you love chemistry and body chemistry.My earth shaped body..This is different you simply would have said round or sphere..but you didn’t. The lullaby when you are mess is very nice line ,and ” clicked our moist tongues” this is routine expression for love and Romance.But the word CLICK is only used when tow thingy perfectly fit into each others,so it makes more deep and amazing. The white shirt on naval comparing with white roses is 👌.” The hush oceanic finger prints…on bosom” wow..damn hot.You are almost playing with readers heart strings. And finishing was soo godd..melted and aroused and again melted in you,as two rest on their bodies for cuddling or for taking rest.This is so satisfying and soo fulfilling.YOU are amazing devika.I don’t know how your brain works everyday.Every day you come with new words and new images.
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How well you have introspected my work, Kalyan!
I am glad that now you are getting along as you read more and more. Each word you described is truly amazing and it is on point!
So happy that you loved my this work too and it really means a lot as you wrote that lengthy comment just to appreciate my words.
Thanks a bunch!
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I must also thank you for reading my comments with lot of patience
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All my pleasure to read your uplifting words!
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Thanks a lot..just reading your new poem..give some time to understand and express my views
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Awesome choices of things to protect. 💛
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Indeed!
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Moving. 🌹👧💛
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Nice of you to say that.
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It’s really wonderful, how much detailing you can stack in a poem without making it look over-detailed.You just hit the sweet spot dear fella.
Alluring
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I just have to pour the truth and here it is hidden in my writing!
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It’s a rare talent. I wish i could develop it someday 🙂
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🙏
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Oh so lovely…
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Thank you.😊
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Ravishing!!! I’m in love😍 this is one of my favorites among your poems💖
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Aww Eli.
You are too kind to say that dear. So much love to you.❤️
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You truly deserve it💖 looking forward to more of your writings. You’re an inspiration💘
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Trust me Eli, I have missed your words too for you are truly beautiful in your ways.
Lots of love!❤️
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I’m sure I was following you. Then I saw that I wasn’t, read this … and slapped my temple! An injustice! Great writing!
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Oh sweet D!
This glitches are common here. I am glad you can join me back again.
Hope to see you soon.😊
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Without doubt as you are on my exquisite write radar 😊
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Such a beautiful work to express love, romance & longing.
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Thanks B!❤️
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You’ve preserved the moments in thoughts and now again in poetry. Beautiful sensual, your unique and descriptive poetic form has captured this perfectly.
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You are kind!
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Just honest!
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