Sounds of you

This evening is a slender fireplace
burning my wet loss of losing you
a loss is a numb attack until felt
and so i see hums, bells sliding between
out cheese skins,
mellow at the bottom, i am a dream of a lavender,
matchsticks burning curtains of you,
slowly
slowly
you meltdown from the Alps, and my garden
towards a barefoot blue whisper.
A crescent moon born beneath the sway of pulp thighs
Grapevines, nocturnal in hushed nights
observing our warm apple breaths,
floral segments onto our clothes-
my white skirt and your black pants

I burn in such fields of coherence,
cleaving affection as my second, language-
Oh man, your arms of white clay
waning thunders of a white moon
so soft and musical,
unveiling a lantern of fireflies.

And then I make a sketchbook of you
amidst the pale pink flowers,
your name embossed like a manor of bees.
There under the branches of hardened leaves
between the sordid naphthalene balls of kiss
I found you, like a fallen star.


41 thoughts on “Sounds of you

  1. “And then I make a sketchbook of you
    amidst the pale pink flowers,
    your name embossed like a manor of bees.
    There under the branches of hardened leaves
    between the sordid naphthalene balls of kiss
    I found you, like a fallen star.”

    Your words are GOLD.
    I’d love to see you as a published poet some day! You’re gonna melt the hearts of so many out there 💘

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      1. That sounds interesting, brother.
        The thing is in the past my collaboration experience didn’t work that well, it’s just a feeling.
        Though I may in future will definitely do.
        Hope you understand.🙏

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  2. Splendid. The level of intensity and passion is unimaginable. Your use of words are so sharp and poised at the same time. It’s totally hypnotic that it totally had me in it’s grip.
    Loved it. 😊

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  3. First, that image. LMFAO
    Now, let me get serious, because this piece deserves just that. It was gorgeous. You always inject power and images so expertly into your writing. You make it seem so easy.
    Also, thanks for the little talk,MVS. It mean a lot.

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  4. This was no less that pure and total beauty! Thank you so much for sharing such an amazing work of art! I look forward to reading more of your incredible writing! I do hope if you have the time you will check out my site! I always aim to encourage and inspire others through the words I share! I hope you have a great week!

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  5. this is exquisite poetry, from the beginning to the end..and such a lovely end…in other words I could understand or at least gauge the depths in this poem unlike the other.

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  6. First of all,how do you write these kind of lines???? How’s your brain working?? Teach me atleast…you are way above the skies in this poetic realm…anyway let me share my views about this amzingggggg poem..”This evening is a slender fireplace
    burning my wet loss of losing you
    a loss is a numb attack until felt
    and so i see hums, bells sliding between
    out cheese skins,” I was mind blown at the beginning itself..comparing loss with wetness and evening with fire …😭😭😭,what are you?? How could you think these lines…💘💘💘💘 you took me to the world between cheesy skins..which says the love is deep into skins..waaaaaaah
    .wonderful devika…”34

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    This evening is a slender fireplace
    burning my wet loss of losing you
    a loss is a numb attack until felt
    and so i see hums, bells sliding between
    out cheese skins,
    mellow at the bottom, i am a dream of a lavender,
    matchsticks burning curtains of you,
    slowly
    slowly
    you meltdown from the Alps, and my garden
    towards a barefoot blue whisper” .This particular lines created a scene in my mind,kind of cinematic..burning certain and seeing images..and you told that you are his garden and meltdown from alps…you should deserve standing ovation…Brilliant…brilliant..brilliant💟💗..and next you wrote beautiful expressions using crescent moon and sway of thighs,apple breaths,and clothes..too romantic..very nice
    “burn in such fields of coherence,
    cleaving affection as my second, language-
    Oh man, your arms of white clay
    waning thunders of a white moon
    so soft and musical,
    unveiling a lantern of fireflies” uffffffff..no words yaaa..I don’t know what to say..out of words..just experiencing awe through this paragraph..such a sexy expression it is..arms of man waning thunders in musical way..wowww😭😭,literally crying .how could you devika…? How can you write these…and ending was mind blowing again unveiling lantern of flies…💓💓💓 “And then I make a sketchbook of you
    amidst the pale pink flowers,
    your name embossed like a manor of bees.
    There under the branches of hardened leaves
    between the sordid naphthalene balls of kiss
    I found you, like a fallen stars” like how you write this…oh my god….sketch book of you between pale pink flowers..damnnnnnn🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥,and name embossed like manor under the branches..woww.and which is gain under hardened leaves..between sordid naphthalene balls of kiss….” ufff..thanks to you. Atleast you ended here..my heart would have blasted this morning with awe and all things I have gon through romance,hotness,poetic geniusity ..etc…I just want to thank with my whole heart for writing this wonderful poem..it your BESTEST IN RECENT TIMES.maybe my personal hot favorite🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥,If there is multiple like box..it would have blasted with my conscious hitting of likes button..don’t think that I am exaggerating all these devika..I just want you to understand what I have gone through this morning while reading this..complete spell bound experience..if you are there neat me..I would have hugged you tight…I don’t know what else to do to express my feeling..completely out of words..hope you understand…God bless you..if you believe in god..or I should thank your mother for giving birth to beautiful daughter like you..who is good inside and out…

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