a death star

i watched you each day, with magma, ash
and towers of a conundrum
taking spirit in the eye
the eye of aghast
devoid of luminous rays
i wanted to be sweet as rain
sitting on chairs, harmonic choir.
but you smoked me like a cigarette
you did again and again
with holes in the palms
scrawny li’l feet of parasitic words,
interstice hollow, feeble like a white faded star.

I was a star once
sleeping beneath your pillow
that lush land of dreams
until the skewered paths of dust emptied my eyes,
eyes of dreams and kiss.
I was a star, soaked in the tranquillity of moments
moments like fragile china, fragile ring.

Dumb is my mouth, I guess
Sequin pattern of Crooked Moon,
missing like pages,
like words unsaid by my mother to father-
Oh darling, my dear.
A cadence to spit,
sickle of time and lies.

44 Comments

  1. Beautiful MVS. The very high standard sometimes may take the fans off track. I wonder if that’s what happened to me. I don’t see any affirmation.
    I have to try hard

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  2. “i watched you each day, with magma, ash
    and towers of a conundrum
    taking spirit in the eye
    the eye of aghast”….πŸ‘ŒπŸ‘ŒπŸ‘ŒπŸ‘Œ,Terrific start..you just pushed me with great force into the poem and made me involve in the emotions..towers of conundrum,eye of aghast..are beautiful lines..superb…”wanted to be sweet as rain
    sitting on chairs, harmonic choir.
    but you smoked me like a cigarette
    you did again and again
    with holes in the palms
    scrawny li’l feet of parasitic words,
    interstice hollow, feeble like a white faded star” wow..how Girl love a boy..and how she gives her heart and again how he hurts her back by using her..you expressed this in fantastic line smoked like cigarettes and did again and again…..this is faaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaabπŸ”₯πŸ”₯πŸ”₯,and next you expressed how it affected with beautiful framing of words and imagery ..white faded star,interstice hollow,etc. The next paragraph was awesome “I was a star once
    sleeping beneath your pillow
    that lush land of dreams
    until the skewered paths of dust emptied my eyes,” perfect..how you reflected lover heartπŸ’œπŸ’œπŸ’œπŸ’œπŸ’œπŸ’œπŸ’œπŸ’œπŸ’œ”I was a star, soaked in the tranquillity of moments
    moments like fragile china, fragile ring” this is great line..loved it…”Dumb is my mouth, I guess
    Sequin pattern of Crooked Moon,
    missing like pages,
    like words unsaid by my mother to father-
    Oh darling, my dear.
    A cadence to spit,
    sickle of time and lies” This is awesome I mean how it affected girl..like crooked moon,missing pages…the way you wrote it poetically always amazes me….kudos devika….

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    1. Hey thanks Kalyan, I really can’t my eyes off from this gorgeous comment. Damn.
      You really took that much of time to just say such beautiful words, I can’t focus more on how thrilled I am currently.

      Thank you so much for such a ocean of zeal and insights for my poetry. I know you have missed a lot but still this makes up for all the others missed one! Your words are precious, know that.

      So humbled I am.πŸ™πŸ™

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  3. Yeah..I am missing your poetry a lot..little busy these days..I can read your poetry ..but to savour every line,to understand..and sometimes I use dictionary to search meanings..and I get lot of urge to express my feelings..it need time to do all these things..soo I am missing them.but still..I loved this a lot

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  4. I’ve read a couple of poems so far and they’ve taken me to places and things I thought I had lost forever. I don’t know how it’s happening, but I know you’re a powerful poetic prodigy, MVS! Oh thank you for your words, gosh!

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  5. This one speaks of deception and lies in a relationship. I loved how you used the metaphor of a dying and dead star to explain the loss of zeal and love in a dying relationship. Pain expressed in the most exquisite way.

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