This Skin is transparent, like a stitch to spew, to flatter the moments of despair. The bruises occur, with an open mouth an empty sheet of braided dreams this skin claps and claps with a bowl of spewing lotus, and a hollow dripping hocus-pocus Peppermint& honey drops with earbuds sagging, this skin melts, in the oceanic mouth of yours. Or this skin divides in my repetitive sins and sins. I gasp and pray till my body collapse with a dying hint of clove, wafting breeze of paddy fields this skin smiles. Like polaroids humming in the crux of my immune skin.
©MVS- NaPoWriMo#16
From the first word to the last.
I loved it
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I am glad. Thank you so much.
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Like polaroids humming
in the crux of
my immune skin.
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I hope you mean to say you liked that part.
Thank you kind Andrew!
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What an original and complete ending to this poem. It leaves the reader fully satisfied – and not easy to do!
congratulations on such a compelling piece.
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I am now satisfied to read such a beautiful feedback.
Thank you so much for this!
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My pleasure – please keep writing – we need your talent:).
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Oh my!🙏
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MVS, my comments are cutting off. This is the second time it happens to me today. I guess WordPress is trying to tell me I am talk too much.
Yes, I liked this piece, and I thought your finale was awesome. Always a pleasure to read your work. Apologies for the miscommunication. Have a wonderful day.
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No worries, Andrew.
I understand these glitches happen all the time, here.
I am though grateful to hear your sweet words.
Peace and light to you.
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Thanks. Peace and light.
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This was something new to me. I’ve read poems about eyes, lips, face, hair and everything but skin. Anyway, I like it.
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Skin is our infinite living and dead companion.
I am happy to know you liked this new spice from my kitchen.
Thank you!
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you are somekinda chef. hehe 🙂
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Metaphor is my love
Sigh!
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As Always Beautiful Valiant Soul. 💕⚘🌹
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Aww.
You are sweet.
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☺I do try.
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Beautiful photo of you. I have a good friend who does Bengali dancing. Incredible vibrance in it. Is that what you dance?
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Hi Maria.
Yes if you are talking about Bharatnatyam so yes that’s what I do.
And thank you.💓💓
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Yes, I was. I so admire.💟
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Thank you Maria.
Btw how did that come to your mind right now?
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My friend Sanchita wears red and black when she dances. Amazing clothes and fabric. I think your photo reminded me.
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Haha. Well this is just a normal saree that I am wearing and not for particular dance event.
Although my one of the post depicts my dance attire, the one you are talking about.
I am so happy to know you find it fascinating.
Much love.
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One of my desires is to wear a saree…love the silks. Love to you too.
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You will be amazed to see the wide range of sarees and categories actually, it’s my favorite dress too. So please, come to India next time and find yourself awed with it’s beauty.
And you are a sweetheart.❤️
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I plan on it some day. ☺💟
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I am happy you found me on instagram too.
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❤️❤️
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The skim is really something like something ……
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It truly is.
Thank you for paying a kind read.
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You know how to play with words. Beautiful.
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Thank you, Ankan.
I always cherish your words!
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Amazing & beautiful as always..👍👏
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Hey, thank you brother.
How have you been?
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Welcome sister!😇
I am doing great & hoping same for you, found your words on insta too.
Positive vibes & great week ahead to you.
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That’s great!
yes. Insta is actually giving me a hard time as i am not more of this social media typo, but yeah change is good often.
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Insta is one the most popular creative social media platform now a days and i guess it’ll be great change .👍👍😇
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Eh, not for me.
🙈
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“this skin melts,
in the oceanic mouth of yours.”
I love these sensuous lines best, part of a very beautiful poem. ❤ 🙂
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Thank you, I am really all peppy to hear such sweet words.
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Peppy is good! 🙂
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Sure it is.🌸
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🙂
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Your comparison is beyond this world. Beautifully done -Polaroids humming in the crux of immune skin. Lovely
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Thank you S!
Means a lot.
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My pleasure
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Nothing I can say that you haven’t heard. So I’ll say nothing at all. You got the skills that send chills.
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Christopher, thank you for such warm words.
I am pleased to hear such high praise.
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Your very welcome miss! Just don’t stop writing. I’m verry picky about the writings that I like so. ya…👌👌👌👌
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Oh, honored truly.
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😊😊😊
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Beyond the reach of words I can use to appreciate.
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🙏🙏
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You and your metaphors..leaves me breathless, one time, every time.
My fav lines”Like polaroids humming
in the crux of
my immune skin.”Beautiful.
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Haha. My metaphors are my scars, darling.
Thank you yet again.❤️
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I know..that’s why you write so beautifully.
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Brilliant my Valiant soul.
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You❤️❤️
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❤❤
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This is a fascinating piece. I read this twice. Love it!!
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Oh wow, my pleasure.
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Skin speaks the inside out.
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Amazing write! God bless!
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Thank you Wendell.
I am pleased to hear such words.
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Lawd, have mercy. To tell of our bodies, who we are, how we are… what you do with words never ceases to amaze me. I thought I commented on this one last month. I should have.
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Beautiful!
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Thanks mita.
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Amazing poetry dear Poet.
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Reblogged this on johncoyote and commented:
Please read and enjoy the work of a talented poet.
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Thank you
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You are welcome dear Poet.
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Absolutely beautiful
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Thank you.
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My pleasure 😊
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Beautiful
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Hey, thanks.
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Awesome 👏 elaborate imagination put concisely 👍
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Beautiful
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It was a melody..
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❤️❤️
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This line blew my away:
“an empty sheet of braided dreams” surrealism at its best…
and everything in this poem of yours is fantastic and so dark I love it. My favorite. 🙂
Hi! Miss you…and I am back! and I posted a new poem.
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It’s so strange, I was today just remembering you Charlie and your writings and here you are.
Thank you and welcome ☺️
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awww…thank you for remembering. I miss reading your work…and I really, really, loved what you created in this entry. 🙂 It’s good to be home. 🙂
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Same here, writer friend.
Would be reading you soon.☺️
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🙂 Bless you my friend.
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The epidermis really does hold our stories inside and out.A most unique and intriguing blend of imagery and metaphor. Love it!
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Beautiful poem with emotional flow, keep writing friend💐💐💐
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Honored.
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You’re most welcome friend💐
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