“Under your skin, the moon is alive”- Pablo Neruda
My body has gone counting
The twists and folds of your skin.
My hands have carved a tattoo
plunged into your chest,
where a basket of sunrises glitter
like the moon’s hideous smile.
I have heard the murmurs of your heart
where white earth blooms.
Like sagacious door-knob,
And the small key-hole,
where I flow like mesmerizing dust,
Aurora hair sparkles,
golden Orion of moon slice resists in you.
Crackles, splinters, chills, winters
found in your wet earlobe,
as I walk upon the moist earth,
my sagging dreams
only to meet your infinite luscious skins of skin.
Β©My Valiant Soul
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Ah! This one ! You took my heart yet again π
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Your words reminded me of Edward Maya’s song!
Thankyou beautiful soul.π
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Your words are just amazing π
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So beautiful πβ€
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Thank you so much, Malavika!:)
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This is gorgeous imagery. One of my favs you’ve written. Delightful writing and speaks to my heart.
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Really? Thank you Scarlet!
I have been missing some of your great writings too, hope to read them soon βΊ
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You’re welcome. π I’ve been working on a series of poetry in the form of stories trying to bring it to life, writing from my heart.
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Oh sounds gret. Would be looking forward to reading them!
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Great words. ..!!! Just beautiful…!!!!!
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Thank you.
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beautiful lines………
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Thank you for your feedback.
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What a beautiful piece.
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Oh, nice to hear from you after so long.
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Again, this piece, demonstrates the chaos inside the mind of the poet. Juxtaposed images like the glitter of sunrises and the hideous smile of the moon, show how all emotions rise inside of us. The sagging dreams is telling of how heavy our drams become when we’ve carried them for so long. I love the opening lines, too, of the body counting the folds of skin of a lover, and I don’t think I’ve ever heard a door knob referred to as being clever. This level of subtle personification is sagacious in itself π The ending is perfect, for where better to meet, than along those skins of skin.
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Our dreams our heavy only till the point we dont find our better half.
The romance does the rest of it.
Thank you for this deep outlook wherein you got the hidden romantic vibe I tried to create.
Thank you once again!
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Yes, this is true. You are most welcome.
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I apologize for not commenting much on your wonderful poetry of late.
Iβve been quite busy working with my editor to refine a rather rough 1100 pages
down to a more manageable 723 pages for a new blog.
I should have a bit more time going forward and besides reading your beautiful poetry,
I hope you donβt mind if I comment more upon it.
Hereβs to your βbasket of sunrisesββ¦
lightning runs
like light
down the cracks
of a shattered
mirror
a many
hued copper
sunrise extends
like the hand
of a child
to a mother
awaking in the
morning just now
like the miracle
that is each day
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I wish you all the best for your next project.
Hope it turns out amazing as well.
I do not doubt your writing skill. And it’s totally understandable if you are not replying or commenting. There is no problem as all I want is my poetry to be still the same.
Thank you for your deep insights and amazing lines.
Lovely to hear from you always.
Much thanks!
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Thank you Devika.
As I’ve said before…
I consider you the best writer on here
Forrest
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I like this one.
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Please read and enjoy the work of a talented writer.
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Thankyou.
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Nice meeting you too. S!
Have a great day.
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This was beyond beautiful. As if Neruda’s quote that you amplified in ways that made me sigh and hold on to my racing heartbeats wasn’t beautiful enough. Stunning work, MVS!
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Hi Nandita!
Thankyou for giving your beautiful insights as it is so nice to hear from you dear.
Missed you!:)
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How nice of you to say so. Well, I’m here now starting afresh. Be seeing you. π
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β€ππsuperbly written Valiant Soul.
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So kind of you!
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Amazing!!!!!
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Aww.
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Truly magnificent! Who am I to appreciate!! Beyond any words of appreciation
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Sounds goodβ¦very beautifully drafted
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Awesome πππ. Don’t have enough words to appreciate this piece.
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So kind of you!
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This is amazingly beautiful ππΌππΌ
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Thankyou.
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Goooooooodβ¦.soo good
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Thankyou.
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Hooked me till the last word, simply amazing.
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Thankyou my friend!
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I am so attached to your writing it feels like each sentence of yours was written with deep emotion and its beautiful.
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Aww.
So sweet of you dear.π
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Coincidentally I just read Neruda’s one of beautiful work yesterday & still mesmerized by his few beautiful lines “i want to do with you what spring does with cherry trees” and so is your work that is mesmering on reading.
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Oh that line is one of my fav.too. I am happy that you found my work the same time while reading his genius poetry.
Thank you so much!
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Beautiful πππ
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Hey!
Thanks dearie
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You’re Awesome πππ
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Aww.
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Keep Writing π
I’m learning from you πππ
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I am honored.
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Understood most of it. Was romantic. A few of the imageries you wove were very beautiful! Great! The word choice was, as always, sublime, and indicative of your style.
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And that soothes me now!
Thanks bro.
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deep^^
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Beautiful. β€
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Aww.. Really beautiful!! π amazing…
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