you would burn in waters,
if you could feel my skin now.
smudged dose of love, insipid flaky fingers
this arm hurts now from resurrecting my soul,
streams of rivers lynching my soft neck.
i long for love and loneliness altogether
cleaved moon dripping honey on pale skin.
you kept me breaking, like twings and forests.
sliced ounce of crooked lemon zest, burning.
it kept me hurting yet alive, you see.
i could feel the faulty facets
leaking sideways of my languid arms.
topsy turvy my tongue, this moment.
i am moth, sucking glaze from marigold,
camouflaging dust & bitter taste of you, perhaps.
this is me, this is survival now.
swallowing all that I see.
So completely raw and compelling.
So well done!
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Oh bill, you give power to my words.
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The pleasure is mine…such energy comes from your pen!!
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Humbled.🌻🌻
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Last line of desperation…I’ve seen that in motion. Lost in life.
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Yes, that thing.
Thank you!
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So vivid and rich with imagery, you always do magic with your words
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Really grateful I am.,🌹🌹
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my pleasure 🙂
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i am moth, sucking glaze from marigold,
camouflaging dust & bitter taste of you, perhaps.
this is me, this is survival now.
swallowing all that I see.
Strong lines, and the feeling that goes with them.
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I feel sorry if you feel it too
Pain can be disgusting at times.
Sending love and prayers to you.❤️
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Love received and reciprocated! You have my best wishes.
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Vivid pain, heartbreak, and love.
You had me entangled in your poetic web with the opening two lines.
“I long for love and loneliness together.” This line resonated deep inside of me. I thought I was the only person who could experience those contrasting needs simultaneously.
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Actually that’s my favorite line too
And glad you felt it that intensely!
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Intensely was the perfect word.
You are one of my favorites MVS, but I think you already know that.
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I know that,but I believe there have been a few of your favorites too in the past. If I am not wrong!
Still, I feel happy. Thank you, A!
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Brilliant
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And she gets time to read me lol
Thanks ❤️
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You are welcome lol xo
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Very nice!
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Thanks!
Would be reading you soon
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Your welcome and thank you
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A very deep and awesome poem my friend
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So Happy to hear from you.
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Thank you, and keep doing what you do
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“this arm hurts now from resurrecting my soul”
You might like the poem to the tune ‘As if in a Dream,’ by Li Qingzhao:
I often recall one sunset in the pavilion by the river.
Having drunk too much, I lost the way home.
My enthusiasm spent, I started back in my boat at dusk
But drifted by mistake into a thick patch of lotuses.
Paddling hard to get through,
Paddling hard to get through,
I startled a whole sandbar of egrets into flight.
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Thank you for sharing this. I think I will read it yet again.🙏
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This is so beautiful❤️
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Like you.❤️
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Hahaha, thank you❤️
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I don’t even know what word in the English language would do this justice.. Wish I could reach out and hug, for gestures are the purest and most potent language! Thank you for this, MVS 💛
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And I am sending you virtual hugs if that suffice!
More love to you❤️
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❤❤
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The lines are echoing in my head after i finish reading it. Its awesome.
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Hey there!
Thank you for paying a read.
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You are awesome. You should have known by now☺
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Your words are like whiskey. They just grow in mind with every repeat reading
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What an epic line that is.! Thanks
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Brilliant
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Hey! Thanks
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I love this
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Pain gets a new definition and reaches a new level of torment when it gets anointed by your magical pen. I’ll be reading this again.
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Hey you there❤️❤️
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Madam, the last line-“swallowing all that I see”, did you meant she has become used to all the hurt and pain?
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Yes.
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I know it is easy to say explain this and that. I can imagine the effort you have put behind to become this good in poetry. Thanks for answering 🙂
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Deep lines .. Nicely written !! 🙂
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Thanks
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Brilliant!
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Thank you so much.
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You’re welcome!
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I love it!
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A tear shared for the pain. Beautiful words put together in a Beautiful way.
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❤️❤️
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Pain is more painful when put into words by brilliant poets …and this is just what you did..
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I do agree. Thank you for these kind words.
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Written with ache and truth. But still a beautifully crafted piece of art!
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Thanks!!
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How did I miss this???? This is sooooooooooooooooooooo wonderful….loved it…but somehow you are not writing this intense these. days……
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Thank you Kalyan. Yes, I am busy with life
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Yeahhh…like to see old devika
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‘This is survival now
Swallowing what I see’
Strong line, deep meaning!
Amazing!🌸
All of your poems depict the true realities of life.
Your words are really magical!
I wish you the best for your future poems!🌻
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Hi Shivani.
Thank you for such heart warming words. Glad you liked my poetry.
Love to you.
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I’m astonished to see your incredible raw work.
I wasn’t aware of this earlier. I’m glad to get the time to read all of them.
You’re doing a great job, Devika.
Wish you many more to go. 😌
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Such a beautiful feedback. I am grateful to read your inspiring words.
Much thanks to you.
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Believe me, you deserve them all.
I’ll make sure to not miss any posts from you now.
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Okay,now truly I am humbled.
Means a lot.
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Amazing! Great poem! Have a great new year ahead 🎄🍰🎶🍀🍀🌿🍀🌿🌲🌿💖🍰💖💖🎄💖💖💖💖
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🙏🙏
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Profound!
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Thanks!
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Your poems are definitely deep and well captivating
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Aww
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Absolutely pure and raw
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Ah, thank you so much.
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I love reading your poems.
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Thank you.❤️
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