I do not write today to hold the things leaking
or to slip across the rooms with fever.
No.
I do not write to mourn the sunburn of humankind,
the lips are already pale, i do not wish to write another metaphor too.
Things that have way, will escape anyhow
and so is my today’s poetry.
It has no sense maybe,
no remorse floating
but i must assure you, I do not write to hold your breath even.
I announce I am rather happy
but then
you might feel my imagery too strong
for I use things too harshly
for i use things in a weird Ethiopian mimic
But the mind does not halt
it will shout
and then you will have
some iterations again, too many fancy laces spread.
Your mind will be inundated with countless meanings of it
and then
you will turn everything to me
for i am the one producing,
collapsing
exhilarating
dying
in ways only unknown here
It is Summer here
the sun will come up and soak in my leaflets
the scribbled ink
the detached sonnets from a stranger.
Everything will die
and yet I might not speak of it
for my words are too fancy for you.
My thoughts exactly, Devika. I often put things in my in-your-face Greek manner and it has lead to certain misunderstandings. Anyway, I really enjoyed this, both the feeling and the poetry.
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Yes!!!! This hurts at times..i have not felt this since ever..but now..after all these years i feel dejected.
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Oh. This so enunciates you and the kind you write. You words are highly deep to float atop.
Lovely write up. ♥💛🧡
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See, i knew it. Aahhh! Maybe i am bad at words.
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No you are not bad at words. You are tooo deep and that’s what you write. deep things. Deep comparisons. Not superficial. Your words are like the innermost particle of an ice cube. Nuclear force of an atom. So powerful and strong. 💜
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Oh my..❤❤❤❤❤
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oh wow.. what a beautiful way to send a message to your readers.
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Yeah, clever yet full of agony.
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People, who like to savour the feeling of art, will definitely read your work. For me, I like that how you can express a single thing in so many of the ways, and the metaphors are just too apt. Getting inspiration from your work is a blessing.
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Thank you Amartya.
I am honoured if i am inspiring you at all. Also, i love your work.
All the best!
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🙂
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Good? Great? Awful? Terrible? Bad? These are not ideas I entertain when consuming someone’s creative work. Words feelings, creativity in any form must be set free, or they die, and as does the one expressing a little if held captive.
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Every writer, especially every good writer, will have doubt, and wonder, is my writing bad? Ultimately they have to make peace with who they are, the message they are sending and not let the thoughts of a few individuals stop them. That seems so easy. It is in fact really hard. But think of it like this, if you did not write you would not express things that others find so mesmerizing and that alone has worth. It is not about what everyone thinks because there will always be haters and jealous people. It is about what you feel and then those who relate to your feelings. I think there are so many who do. I am one of them.
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Candice, i am legit teary right now. I am generally never seeking for validation..never I did in past so many years..but I have heard atleast 4-5 people saying how harsh my work can be. I mean, i get it but then..that’s me.!!!
Thank you for spreading your love to me. You are one of the finest editor, the person I know here.
🙂
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I know you never seek validation. And I know what you were saying in your post and how honest your heart is. Your friends and those who believe in you will always lift you up. That is what we feel is right and what we want to do. You are dear to so many. Never stop writing. It is your path.
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“It is Summer here
the sun will come up and soak in my leaflets
the scribbled ink
the detached sonnets from a stranger.”
I’m sure you’re in no need for validation but your poetry (along with a couple of other talented souls in the online poetry world whom I admire greatly) is a gold standard that I aspire to whenever I sit down and write. You are a writer’s writer, if that makes sense, you are an author that poets love to read.
And as a great philosopher once said, haters gonna hate hate hate.
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Hi!
Thank you for checking up on me. If my words are making sense to you, I feel obliged.
Thank you for staying put with my poetry and for such hopeful words.
Means a lot!
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no one reads bad writing, you just need to take a look at your growing readership.
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You humble me.🙏🙏
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Let’s get this straight Devika. Your poetry is magnificent. The use of words, the imagery you create, the metaphors you use… everything is magnificent. Your poetry is very sensual in some cases but it is intellectual too. It has great depth. It is one of the best poetry I’ve ever read.
Yours
G.
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You guys! Gabriela, you have always supported and have been kind to me. It means so much.
Thank you for your golden poetry, your beautiful heart.
Much love!
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My pleasure Devika. 🤗💐🤗🌺🌸💝
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Things that have way will escape anyhow….
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it comes with maturity. to not let scrutiny affect you. not everyone will like or just understand all that you write and it is completely fine. focus on your vision and not on the noises that you’d stumble upon.
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This is an incredible piece, really loved reading this piece ♥️
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Thank you Pia.
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A thought provoking metaphors. Kudos to your elbow
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What you write is who you are and no matter what it look like to others you can’t mold or change yourself into someone who you are not.
And you write beautiful, your work are beautiful art pieces of literature, I love them.
Please keep writing for the ones whom you inspire with the beauty of your words and metaphors, I am one of them ❤🤗
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This means so much to me. The fact that my poems can evoke emotions, keeps me uplifted. Thank you Anamikaa for such an overwhelming message.
So much love to you.
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🙂 too bad say bad .. volumes speaks and Modesty winks!!
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I’m not a poetry critic. However, I see good writing when I read it.
Perhaps the harshness can also be looked upon as truth.
Your poetry is excellent
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Thank you for going through my work!
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Amazing.. It would be grateful for me if you visit my blog and gave me some blessings as I am a beginner..
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I absolutely love poetry when they’re in their simplest form, no heavy words, no strong imagery just emotions weaved together in the simplest of words. Amazing work, I loved it. I too recently started a poetry blog and it’d be great if you check it out.
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I love this. Sometimes I get conscious about my writing/poetry because they’re usually more on the dark side and I often think I should write something light for a change. But I can’t because it’s not what I feel. Idk if that makes sense but it’s good to know it’s not just me💚. Thank you for this wonderful piece
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Fantastic!
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This is so expressive, amazing work!
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I love this ❤️
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Thank you.
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Devika, your poetry is magnificent… truly a work of art!
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ThaNk you so much.
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I hear you Devika. A poet is the most vulnerable and most brave of all. We are clawing our way towards the end of the abyss trying to find meaning to our convulsed griefs. Our words are the perfect menagerie for the humankind.
You are brave, you are a poet.
“For i am the one producing,
collapsing
exhilarating
dying
in ways only unknown here”.. Yes and yes
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Everything (emotion, thought, silence) is transient. But you just have to carry on anyway.
This is a challenging piece – good – you don’t just scratch the surface.
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So kind of you.
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Means a lot:)
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