Things return like autumn, with leaves, shades and colours as your mountain essence stick to my collar-bone, in the moments of nights, haze, dawn. One by one, I circle around you, infinite-ball-of-love and soaked in your fingers and memories of the return, this mahogany burns, it burns as a bay leaf in segments and silvery parts I fall into parts, your demure pasture of lightnings, your mushy belly button your mouth of Jasmine We made love to grow old together to be a single fallen star, we made love for your return where I am picked and loved, like a frozen pea, in your hand. And, I wait here for your return all like a wool, Fixation to occur.
©MVS
I love your use of simile and metaphor as well as the style you employ here, separating the stages of cycled return. Autumn is such a great season to describe the change because it does offer the most vibrant colours, especially the scarlets that run like blood. Passionate, detailed, vivid and beautiful
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Hey, thank you for such beautiful words. I am overwhelmed to see your minute details about my work. It simply makes me happy.
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You are kindly welcome!
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The vivid imagery you portrayed around the fulcrum of return is sheer brilliance. Your thoughts are very very deep 🌸
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The vivid imagery you portrayed fulcrum on the word return is sheer brilliance. Your thoughts are deep and pure 🌸
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🙏🙏
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😊looks like I posted twice
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Haha. No issue.
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😊
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So beautifully done.
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Hey thanks.❤️
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Welcome 💖🌺
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Beautiful and enchanting 👏👏
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🙏🙏
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Each of your poems portrays a story, each one described more beautiful than the other. Maybe it’s this depiction which makes you such an amazing writer 🙂
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Wow! How kind of you to say that.🙏
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Haunting but hopeful. Very beautiful
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Hey, thank you.
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Perfect opening MVS. Also loved the opening of the third stanza as well, “We made love to grow old together.” That was right on.
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Haha, I knew that you will like that Andrew.
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Am I that predictable? lol
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Not sure, but I think my comment may be in your spam folder.
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Beautiful.How the eternal wait for our loved ones has the essence and beauty of returning seasons and gives sustenance for our withering souls.
My fav lines”We made love
to grow old together
to be a single fallen star,
we made love for your return
where I am picked and loved,
like a frozen pea”
Frozen pea used as a metaphor is the icing on the cake.
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That’s my favorite part as well
Romantic poetry does make us think an yearn for the same thing I guess.
Much love.❤️
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Yes absolutely.Love and Hugs,Devika.
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Sparked my appetite if it were not bedtime.
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Aww.❤️
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I love reading these again and again
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Write, sister. You speak the words of my heart.🦋
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Beautiful! I especially love the last stanza, Devika.
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Thank you love.❤️
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My pleasure! 💜
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Bay leaf, frozen pea, where do you come up with these images!? God it’s so good.
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My mind has all the storage. Haha.
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Very nice!
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Thanks!!
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No problem
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Enchanting poetry, and so romantic.
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Your words make me happy. Thank you.
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I have read this before and I love reading it again.Beautiful.
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How do you write this good? What is your inspiration source? I mean come on what is it that you are hiding from us. Take a bow. You are talented and hardworking too. Coming up with such great posts back to back isn’t a piece of cake. Keep surprising me. 😂 😘
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Dear, you have just given me the best gift of the day.
I can’t thank you enough.
Much love!! It’s all in my mind. No hidden games.❤️
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Well then I feel grateful that I get to read your work. 😊😊
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