You would bleed mentally, axis by axis to know my aching cheeks and lips. they do not flutter, engulfed in smokes my mouth, volatile and dark i am a pattern of transition disgusted each day, separation of tongues divides these breasts once supple, i am a sliced burning moon only diced further, till i dismantle my nerves. I will die a walnut death— with cracks and dust flooding my brain.
©MVS
NaPoWriMo#11
P.S-I did not take care of punctuations, deliberately because i was too lazy to do it. And i do not care!
Bravo…👍
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Aching mind pleases all, indeed.
Thank you.
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Yeah aching mind pleases all and soothes another aching one.
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Ah, hope you are well and if not things will be well, that’s all a sis can say.
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I have always been somewhere in between being well and being totally flushed, and that’s a lovely place. Thank you so much. ☺️
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Lovely place? Oh damn.
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😀
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Wonderful!
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Hey, thank you friend.
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my pleasure!
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I like it dark, very nicely expressed.
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And that’s what I like as well.
Thank you, Ankit.
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You’re welcome MVS.
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Amazing, absolutely amazing..
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Thank you love❤️
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Ah wow as always!
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You, Soiba are truly a blessing to me.
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xx
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beautiful syntax and emotion! who cares about the punctuation because I think it works well; sometimes it’s a lot of fun to play with a lack of punctuation! 💜
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Haha true that.
Thank you for taking out some time to read my verse.
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So amazing VS, a walnut death…oh yes!
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Okay so it’s only valiant soul haha.
Thanks lovely.
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Truly…your definitely are!
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I meant you missed an M while addressing me.
Lol.❤️❤️
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I know , I meant you are, MVS.
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Ah, I got that lovely.
🖤🖤🖤
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🖤🖤🖤
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The dark surrealism tone of your poetic write is fantastic and brilliant. You always get my brain flowing with your imagery.
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Yes, that is what at the end of the day clings me fiercely.
Thank you kind, Charlie.
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You are welcome my friend.
I’m such a huge fan of your dark surrealism style that I get influenced by your work. 🙂
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Oh my!
Now this is flattering
🙏
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Bless your heart. 🙂
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You express it well
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Thank you Lorraine.
Hope you are well.
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Oh wow! The metaphors you use help the feeling become so real!
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Thank you PD. At times I feel you may feel negative reading my words for your writings are full of verbose wisdom.❤️
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You are very welcome dear friend.
I don’t feel negative. A lot of my poetry in the past has come from a very intense churning within. I look at that phase as beautiful too. My heart just feels a lot for you at times. I honor your journey my friend, it is bringing forth such a tremendous gift that you keep sharing with us. As long as it nourishes you, I wish you all the joy possible on the way.
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“My heart just feels a lot for you”..this took my breath now.
Thank you for everythig!
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Bleeding mentally axis by axis,wow
Emotional mathematics,loved this line it clearly says how suffering happens time to time ,” they do not flutter engulfed in mouth ,volatile and dark”.it’s says how those aches rooted deep into you but still volatile and moving….and one of the beautiful line is ‘” pattern of transition disgusted Every day” wowww..soo apt..loved it..you explained the change of human mind in most beautiful poetic way..” sliced burning moon…” another oxymoron..and” sliced further to dismantle my nerves” wow..beautiful imagery👌👌👌👌…dismantling nerves is very innovative..and usage of word walnut death….loved it…you almostvgave life to walnut..whenever I eat them now I remember your poetic line..or I will imagine how walnut die when I eat…
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Thank you Kalyan. That’s so generous of you to read my words with all your devotion. I am really thrilled to hear from you .
Hope you have been well.
Peace and light to you!
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Don’t think of the punctuation even the poetic break…just write as you are writing…enchanting and mesmerizing…
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Yeah, exactly that.
Thank you Sangbad.
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Welcome…
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This is intricately beautiful.
Well penned. 🙂
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Hey!
Thanks a lot.
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You’re welcome.
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Eventhough I have shared my views on insta, I will share them here too!!😌
This is just brilliant! So powerful, so painful!! Bravoooo!!! Amazingly penned! 👏👏👏👌
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Yes, now this shows your immense pleasure of reading my this poem Parth.
I will thank you again.
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Always a pleasure!!😋😋😋 Thank you!😌
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This is such an amazing one! So profound! ❤ ❤ love the way you put it: "i am a sliced burning moon" and then "walnut death" Wonderful thoughts!
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Charisma, you make me happy always.Love you girl.❤️
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And love you back! ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤
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Who else can portray the pain better than you, Devika? These are my fav lines from the poem “i am a sliced burning moon only diced further,”. You are, you absolutely are.
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You are my constant.🖤
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Awww..Love and Hugs dear.
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Such a beautiful poetry. The words dark and restless but thoughts pure and honest. Thank you sharing
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I am happy my work touches you.
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It sure does.
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Beautiful and wonderful. And about punctuations- that’s my favourite blogger 👍
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Nicely penned:)
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