“I HAVE LEARNED THAT I STILL HAVE A LOT TO LEARN”- MAYA ANGELOU
Cracking my pieces of delusions, with your fainted memory
like auburn leaves of sun rays,
with autumn diluted in veins of winters,
I wander and travel my electrolyte body,
time and again.
In the wilderness of my pituitary,
tongues of vague currents
erupting from my caged chest
a criss-cross of the eye, a criss-cross of mouth,
inexplicable waves thunder my jaws
and you reside in a big hollow of truth.
I am a summer weed,
waxed and shaved and fainted,
I swell and fell, again with a needle’s spine
to understand the resistance of lies,
My backbone twitches, my moth-shaped eye
I hallucinate, blinded, drugged, erected
and I swivel like a sickle of time.
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Great finale. Good write
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How kind of you, Andrew.
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Always a pleasure to read you
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“Cracking my pieces of delusions, with your fainted memory” wow…the starting itself is amazing,how nice,you take everything as object and use it in poem,I love that..and you define the functioning of that again by imagination of another object,like fainted memory an object and functioning is to crack delusion..superb….”with autumn diluted in veins of winters,
I wander and travel my electrolyte body,” this is most brilliant line..autumn diluted in Winters…you have different style the style of writing in which you go use depths of emotion in most creative way…..”tongues of vague current erupt from my caged chest,where it is the wilderness of pituitary…” the greatness of this line..if I write that line it would be another stanza. But you used pituitary gland,which is centre point of secretions and all other metabolic activities..the brevity in your lines are amazing. That makes reader to think deep…last stanza expressing you are summer weed ,like how you fell AnD raise and move again..tells the state of a person…”again with a needleโs spine
to understand the resistance of lies,” this line is another beautiful line..because needles spine to understand resistance of lies..that’s what I said above..you gave resistance as functioning to lies..which makes us understand what person is going through…”swivel of sickle time..” this is also beautiful expression
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Kalyan, all you need to know is that I read all your feedbacks with utter sincerity and smile.
The depth with which you dive into my poetry is beyond phenomenal. I also never find your verbose although often I like to keep my replies a bit short, only the days I am a little low or something like that.
I just wanted to confirm that, I always respect your charming words and shall always do.
Thank you for reading, yet again!
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I love the imagery!
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You girl.โค๏ธ
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You come alive here and that’s awesome because it ends the poem perfectly:
“I am a summer weed,
waxed and shaved and fainted,
I swell and fell, again with a needleโs spine
to understand the resistance of lies,
My backbone twitches, my moth-shaped eye
I hallucinate, blinded, drugged, erected
and I swivel like a sickle of time.”
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My words can deliver liveliness to my dear friend, what else do I wish for.
Thank you, my writer friend!๐ค
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You’re most welcome. ๐
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Nice one!
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Humbled!
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Wonderful poem full of atmosphere and imagery
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Thank you!
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Everything from beginning, middle, & ending…was epic and superb! in your ways of intense writing and from your heart.
As I read your poem…I was listening to this song because it reminded me of your title.
Hope you like the music their one of my favorite underground bands.
Skinny Puppy – Assimilate live 1987 remastered HD
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I am always thrilled to hear your sweet words.
Thank you Charlie, and definitely will be listening to the song.
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๐ It makes me happy to hear you say that. ๐
You welcome, my friend. Hope you enjoy the music and its performance. ๐
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Well, I think so.
Thank you Matthew.
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How do you do it , Devika? One after another of epic writing. I am always amazed to read your work.
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Yassy, you are a lovely soul as I always say.
Thank you.โค๏ธ
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Always welcome , my dear ๐๐
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Great work Valiant
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Means a bunch, Ben!
Thank you for reading me. Always appreciate it.
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Reaping
poetic brilliance
from the wilderness.
Weeds and all …
I love this.
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I am always happy to see your warm words.
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to understand the resistance of lies โ one amazing line to me! โฆif I may choose among so many beautiful lines.
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This is one of my fav too.
Thank you PD!
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You are most welcome!
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What a wonderfully disorienting poem!
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Disorientated?
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The descriptions are very vivid and unusual, in a looking for order in chaos sort of way.
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OH,THANK YOU.
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I liked how you are used words to conjure the thoughts of assimilating the feel in the nature around you.
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Thanks M.โค๏ธ
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You are welcome,Devika.
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Truth is sometimes shadowed in an illusion of whatever unreal is in front of us. If words can shape in pain like the way you do, I want to see how they design a picture when you are in utmost bliss…
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Utmost bliss!? Wow!
I am sure it’s a nice place.
Thank you Harsh for reading my work.
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We all will be there, someday.
The pleasure is all mine. ๐
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Ah.
Thanks!
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This created a beautiful imaginary, the words I mean.
Beautifully penned. ๐
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Humbled, I stand.
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Well, glad to have stumbled on your blog.
Great blog and much greater poems.
Keep writing.
Looking forward to reading more of your work. ๐
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I surely will be reading you soon and thank you for the kind words.
I truly respect that.
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Oh, thank you. There’s no such obligation, per say. ๐
And you are most welcome. ๐
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Beautiful beautiful beautiful
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