Alcohol on my newly-born skin,
Do you see the patterns and the checks, the spotted wings?
I lick this ferocious almond scales on my skin, counting the pores
And I measure the breadth and length, obtaining details of details.
The oak tree knows the dents and paints
in the surreal landscape, where people romance
The lavender fields twist in its imperfection,
it sees black, grey, black, grey.
We travel and remorse like a soaked cotton ball in hallucinations,
We learn and emancipate, we gulp metamorphosis
and stack our bodies with memories, rub eyelids to breathe.
We survive and smoke, smoke till the moon spits anger, guilt to our innocence if any.
We are a floating wax of titanium spirits yet we fear cravings. Solivagant in dreams.
I suck the sand, the colourful dust and lips of my lover
I suck the galaxy of you and me.
I know, this arithmetic of us and time. We will evolve too.
©My Valiant Soul
It’s always a pleasure to be the first liker and commentor!!! lol
Lovely words! 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Ofcourse dear brother.
Nice to hear from you always!
🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
🤐am spelled bounded…
LikeLiked by 1 person
And I am thankful to you.
LikeLike
Always welcome…
LikeLiked by 1 person
Check my first poem here in blog…reposted it…
LikeLiked by 1 person
What is the title?
LikeLike
The Morning That Was Serene & Melancholy
LikeLiked by 1 person
Just wonderful valiant !
LikeLiked by 1 person
Hey, Ben!
Thankyou so much.
LikeLike
This one is wonderful. Exceptional piece.💝 I mean come on. I am in love with it.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Yiee.
That made me smile.😊
LikeLiked by 2 people
It’s beautiful. I don’t know what to write For it, it’s astounding.
LikeLiked by 1 person
You reading my work satisfies me and thrills me dear.
Thank you for your love, always!❤
LikeLiked by 1 person
❤️❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
“The oak tree knows the dents and paints
in the surreal landscape, where people romance
The lavender fields twist in its imperfection,
it sees black, grey, black, grey”
Nothing could be more perfect… ❤ ❤ ❤
LikeLiked by 1 person
Aww.
Thank you Shefali so much for your read.
It’s your love that you see beauty in my work.
Love to you!❤
LikeLiked by 2 people
You are generous to say so…
Your work is commendable…
LikeLiked by 1 person
Hugs!😊
LikeLike
❤
LikeLike
Gets better every time you read it.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Mayank for reading my words.
LikeLike
oooh! What do I say yet again, just so so incredible!
LikeLiked by 1 person
And my dear PD says so I believe it.
Thanks sweetheart!😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
You are very very welcome 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
😊😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
Fabulous
LikeLiked by 1 person
Coming from a generous and a brilliant writer.
Thank you.
LikeLiked by 2 people
Awe thank you! I hope you are well today.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I am. Thankyou for asking.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Welcome my friend
LikeLiked by 1 person
I especially love the imagery in this, Devika. Felt like getting lost in someone.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Glad you felt that.
Thank you A!😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
My pleasure.
LikeLiked by 1 person
😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
Great and beautifull
LikeLike
Beautiful words..especially the imagery..
LikeLiked by 1 person
Glad you liked it.
Much thanks.
LikeLike
Beautiful!!!!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Hope you are well.😊
LikeLike
Loved it.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Many thanks!
LikeLike
How do s your brain works?? Please tell me..I want to know how can you think that deep and still put in words that beautifully
LikeLiked by 1 person
Haha.
I am so humbled after reading your kind words.
I guess it flows naturally.
LikeLiked by 1 person
What a natural genius..jealous of y ou😏😏
LikeLiked by 1 person
🙏🙏
LikeLiked by 1 person
I like this!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Breathtaking!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Soma.😊
LikeLike
This is such a powerful line:
“We learn and emancipate, we gulp metamorphosis”
Stripped down to bare bones… “We become free and change”, but much more emotion is expressed in an amazing way here. “Emancipate” as in a proclamation declares a much stronger and defiant arrival of freedom gained from learning.. “gulp metamorphosis”… “gulp” as in drink with all our might. Drink from a fire hose. “metamorphosis” change on a scale of from a caterpillar to a butterfly. The change being so great that the one changing is no longer recognizable, but it has been a spectacular and beautiful change.
Again, here on word choice:
“We are a floating wax of titanium spirits”
“titanium” such an unusual word choice, it’s meaning cannot be insignificant. “titanium” strength beyond strength… that strong. That strong.
That’s just commenting on a couple of phrases. It’s a very strong piece and masterfully executed Devika.
Have a nice day Star Diamond.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh my!
How strong your remark is. I am speechless truly.
Your comment is more powerful than my poetry. That minute observation only a genius like you can do, Forrest!
Today I feel you know my mind, my emotion like no one else perhaps!
This work indeed is powerful and you felt that.
What more can I say.
I am obliged to hear from you.
Thank you so much, kindly!
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thanks.
LikeLike
You are more than welcome…
LikeLiked by 1 person
Everyone has said it all! Great writing, Devika!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Alex.
Your comment was missing and I was looking forward to reading it.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Sorry, I missed this one in my reader. I have to go to your blog sometimes to see if I have missed anything. Sorry for the late reply. You are welcome!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Is something wrong?
I generally do not get this vibe from you.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Sure friend.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Very nice poem, and deep!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Appreciate your words!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Your welcome
LikeLiked by 1 person
‘I suck the galaxy of you and me’ ❤️ Gorgeous!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Aww..
Thanks Kristiana.!
LikeLiked by 1 person
U made this writing a wonderful piece of art…. Great going
LikeLiked by 1 person
Pleased to hear that.
LikeLiked by 1 person
🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Beautiful!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you.
LikeLike