That night was like firecracker. Galaxy overloaded with the stardust. The hums of two souls on this bed sheet could be heard above in the oblivion red sky. The music that our touch produced, the chains formed of lust, the golden promises, the congruence of love. That impeccable mystery rocked the spaces above, it rained heavenly like our jocund voices were heard. The smell of your skin mingled with the Celebration flew across, through the fields brushing those mustard crops and to the valley declaring thunderstorms. The collision was into our breaths, into our sighs.
I saw you bitting my tongue. My pink tongue.
My moans took the form of transparent dewdrops, it was a paroxysm of fire and ice, gliding through your sturdy caricature, flowing diligently into your mind. Creating motif. Chemical formula finally lingering your colossal enigma. The intrusive knots of passion.
It was the thumping of our heartbeats, the intoxication of love, the caress of your touch, making me that fragile flower blooming in despair. A lotus. A shadow of your soul dancing on Earth.
P.S -My poem Soul on Soul published on Spill words. You may check my work here.
©My Valiant Soul
You are beyond fantastic in this genre 😍
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Haha, you Manveen.
Thanks my friend!😊
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😉
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Wonderful poem !!
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Thank you so much.
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Simply sensational…seductive words and amorous imagery….beautiful 😍😍😍😍
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Honoured I am!
Thank you my lovely friend.☺
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That’s so sensual. You have played so exquisitely with words . Love 💞
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Oh, my adorable friend.
It means a lot.
Much love!
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❤️❤️
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Hope you will check my poem on Spillwords.😊
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I did. Devika, it’s beautiful and touched my heart. Soul on soul 💞 woww
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Thrilled to learn that.😊
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Your prose is like your poetry, unrestrained by typical, grammatical conventions. I like the unbridled nature of the form and the sensual/passionate imagery. The Celebration of two souls through physical means is well played out here. Nicely done, Devika.
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I am really thankful that you can observe my writing style here. At times, all writers want is to write without knowing tevhniques and manners.
This came down straight from my that unbridled pen as you say.
So glad you liked it!
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I did enjoy it very much and you are most welcome!
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Nice poem!
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Thank you for your kind read.
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Your welcome
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Congratulations on your being further published Devika.
You are putting together quite an impressive and well-deserved list of accomplishments.
Forrest 🙂
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Wow! Thank you for your genuine blessings Forrest.
I have been glancing your work off late, it’s really chilling to read.
Have a great day ahead!
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Thank you Devika. As I’ve said and will repeat, I think you are the best writer on here. A compliment from you means a great deal. You have a great week ahead. Forrest
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Your words are transcendent.
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Wow! What a lovely feedback.
I am pleased to hear that.
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Pleased to give. I’ll check out more of your work. The first grabbed me, so I’m going to stay.
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You are more than welcomed to savour my sad words.
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Sexy seductive sensuous
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Very deep valiant 🙂
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Thank you.
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I just love this. So powerful and the union of words is luscious.
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Thank you so much
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I Almost felt it too, then felt like an unitentional voyer or gooseberry!! The words are powerful and beautiful!!
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Words are the strongest as you know!
Thank you for your kind read.
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Yes
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Oops! Unintentional
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Amazing and exquisite! 🙂 Your writings are magical!
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My dear sweetest PD❤
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🙂 🙂 Lots of love always.
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😊
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Seductive words with extraordinary construction
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Your words are uplifting, thank you.
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YOU are welcome
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Sensual and ethereal. The image of souls dancing int he throes of ecstasy is what truly happens when we make love to someone we are in love with. Your words are passionate and come from a deep place where love has been experienced. And, congratulations on being published. Here’s to continued success in the poetry world, you deserve it, my friend!
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I tried to be best in this once again, but somehow I thought it wasn’t good. Thanks to your feedback that made me confident yet again.
You are the best in savouring the word imagery and the concept.
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I think you need never try for poetry flows from you naturally. You have such a wonderful gift to be able to describe in unique ways, what has been described millions of times by others. You give a fresh voice to many human emotions and I applaud that. It is your uniqueness that makes your work stand out so much. And that, my dear friend, is work worth savouring 🙂 You are always welcome to my feedback as long as you continue to write such beautiful poetry!
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You have me all numb now.
I couldnt thank you enough.
So much respect for you.
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What a great image. The thanks is mutual!
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😊
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